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(andrew_kim316@yahoo.com) on Wednesday, March 31, 2004 at 21:10:18
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charname: Jack Taylor ("Jackie Hyde")
race: Human
gender: Male
bdate: 5/5/1895 Berlin, Germany
descript: He stands 5 feet 10 inches tall, and weighing 135 pounds. He was born with brown hair, but as he grew older, he has a gray hair.
history: He was born in May 5th, 1890. He was born in an educated family. His father was a scientist, and his mother was a teacher. Just like his parents, he grew up educated.
During college, he majored in biochemistry to study the evolution of the world and the chemicals that have been unfound and exists.
After graduating from college with a PhD in hand, Jack was hired by Adolf Hitler, the Nazi leader, as one of Hitler's top scientists on January, 1925.
With Hitler's strong charismatic speech, he was unsure of Hitler's strategy, but Jack followed Hitler's plans. His reason was to survive from the Hitler's crimes.
On March of 1931, Hitler announced to his scientists to build a nuclear weapon for the victory of Germans. Scientists have endeavored, but failed. The project was classified.
After Hitler's suicide, Jack returned, holding a cup of water, to the lab to check the safety of the dangerous nuclear atoms of the weapon. Mysteriously, a drop of nuclear radiation drops into his cup. He drinks it. After he drank, he felt a strong muscle growing in him, morphing himself into a monster destroying almost everything in the lab.
When he became a human-self, he invents some sort of chemical liquid that might stop him from turning himself into a monster. He drinks the liquid, but he was unable to turn himself back into a human form. Instead, his monster side is within his human side. He became half human, half monster. He later finds out he was ageless.
After 50 years of loneliness to find the cure, he experiments another one of his liquids. This time, he could turn himself into a human, but only in daylight. During the night, depending on his emotions, he will either turn into a monster or a half breed.
After living a disasterous 110 years, he moves to United States of America in order to redeem himself for his wrong-doings and find the best cure he can find to live as a human being.
items: Jacket.
powers: none
played_by: Ron Rifkin
player: I'm Andrew Kim. I've played this game before, but ran out of ideas so I quit. If I come up with my ideas again... will it be renewed? I'm 17 without a job. I love watching Buffy the Vampire Slayer and Angel.
age: over13
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Proposal: Jackie Hyde
This was submitted as a LABN haracter, but I think it fits better here. Feel free to contact the Player with suggestions...
Proposal: Jackie Hyde
I don't know if Andrew will read this, but Dave's note about dates being 10 years off is interesting to consider. Nuclear fission was discovered by a German and an Austrian by 1938, but the Allies only found a primitive nuclear programme when they got to Germany.
In short they had a programme in place, but not a very good one. Heissenburg's strength was as a theorist, not an engineer. more information on the programme can be found there.
Another interesting question: how much did he resist Nazi doctrine? Is he a completely apolitical scientist, does he have other views? Presumably as a German he would have shut up if he were, say, a secret democrat.
Because of the historical context - does he himself or anyone else in the family have 'undesirable' blood? Jewish, gypsy, slav?
How did he get funding and equipment to find the cure for his condition after?
Er can't think of any more....
Proposal: Jackie Hyde
I actually don't want to sound harsh, but I felt that Andrew's last contribution to LABN was pretty poor in that though his character Derek Park had all the potential of a worthy character he just couldn't be bothered to actually explore him outside of a few disjointed initial posts (of which, in my opinion, were of a low quality.) I also know he had trouble writing in the format that is standard for our game.
Now all this aside, I would LOVED to be proved wrong. But I feel Fantastic Legends, just like LABN cannot support a player who can't write to a certain standard, or who has a limited ability in the use of prose English.
To prove me wrong, I'd ask Andrew to submit an initial post for concideration. (As other players have actually done, just look at Athela's proposal to see how it's done). For me this would not only show any improvement in Andrew's writing technique, but also prove his comittiment to the game (which let's face it, apart from being fun IS a comittment, since there's nothing worse than getting involved with another character for their player to suddenly up and vanish when they get bored again.)
So there it is, I may be a hard ass or a bitch, but those are my criteria for accepting an application from this player. Sorry.