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charname: Valkyrie
race: Genetically Engineered Human
gender: Female
group: None
position: HERO
descript: Age: 24
Height: 5'11
Weight: 130 lbs.
Hair: Long, straight, and very yellowish blonde.
Eyes: She has pale blue eyes which seem to fade to grey at the outer edges.
Physical Features: She is incredibly beautiful, well proportioned and
gracefully built. Her skin is very pale. However, she has two physical
deformities. She has six fingers on her left hand and she also has elongated
canine teeth that make her look like she has fangs. Her eyes also glow
iredescent green when light is shone directly on them, like a cats.
Demeanor: She is normally quiet and reserved, mostly because she doesn't like
to talk because it shows off her teeth. She is most of the time friendly,
however, but she has an innate desire to keep to herself when possible. She
manages to give off the impression of a demur woman that can still defend
herself.
Attitude: Valkyrie is a very kind and understanding individual. However, she
knows how to take care of herself and she is not adverse to using maximum force,
but only when she deems it necessary. She will always, however, try to solve
the conflict peacably before forcably.
Lifestyle: Valkyrie lives a simple life. She doesn't drink, smoke, or anything
of the above and her living quarters are simple. She prefers places with lots
of trees and wilderness and she will spend hours wandering in the woods. She
has a few close friends, but not many.
Costume: Valkyrie dresses demurely in a white dress that covers her from neck
to ankle while still highlighting her feminine form. She usually wears a cowled
white cloak along with it and mid-calf length white boots.
Special Effects: Her eyes glow green under certain light/dark settings.
history: Valkyrie was born as the result of a Soviet expirament to create a
perfect soldier for their army. They chose the best of their soldiers and
cloned him, but added different genetic strands from various animals into the
DNA sequence to code for desired traits such as speed or enhanced senses.
Several hundred fetuses were cloned. Valkyrie's was an anomaly from the start.
All of the clones were supposed to be male, but four turned out to be female.
After much deliberation, the project manager decided to keep them and see what
became of them. Only three of the infants survived gestation to be born:
Valkyrie and two of her brothers. Valkyrie herself, having extensive powers of
memory, can barely remember some of the events of her life before a year old
but she has very clear memories of her siblings. She remembers being in a
nursury with two boys. Both were pale like her and growing shocks of blonde
hair. One boy had steel-grey eyes...scary eyes. The adults that cared for them
called him Wraithe. The other boy was badly mishapen. He had nubs on his back
that could have been the beginning growth of wings...his irises were a pale
whitish color, almost indescernable from the surrounding white of his eyes. The
adults called him Seraphim. They all played together, until one day Wraithe was
gone. She never saw him again after that.
By the time she was two years old, her powers had grown more evident. She
could move things with her mind and she could tell when the adults were thinking
most of the time. In the less mentally strong ones, she could even implant her
own thoughts and wishes and the adults would do them. She and Seraphim would
have hours of amusement in confusing the adults. By this time, the nubs on his
back had grown into recognizable proto-wings. Then one day, she suddenly knew
that the adults had figured her out. She huddled in fear under the bed in the
room she and Seraphim slept and played in and nothing Seraphim could do would
cheer her up or bring her out. Then they came for her. A man who smiled in a
way that was supposed to be friendly but which Valkyrie knew was not came and
coaxed her out from under the bed with food. She didn't want to come but she
was hungry. When she was out, he picked her up and told her that everything
would be ok and carried her out of the room. The last thing she remembered
seeing was Seraphim's face, mouth open wide in shock and his big scared eyes.
In the years that followed, she was taught math, science, languages, a first
rate education. All the while, her powers were being honed. She was exercised
in the gym for several hours every day to strengthen her body and exercised for
several hours at moving objects with her mind and in precognition and telepathy.
All of her tutors were specially selected so that she found it almost impossible
to look into their minds. They underestimated her stubborness though, and one
day her tutors fled the room after she had sent them mental images of each of
their own seperate worst fears befalling them. She was then 15. After that,
they put her to work. She was taught charm and social graces and then she would
accompany premiers and military officials at their meetings as a "secretary" but
what she would really be doing was peering into the minds of their oponents and
relaying the thoughts to her bosses. She hated this job though, espeically as
the military began to make more and more use of her to interrogate prisoners and
to help plan military strategy. She tried to escape several times, but each
time they just isolated her further. One day, while sitting in her lonely room,
she began to imagine that she was walking along the outer hall. She could see
it all planely in her head. She could see the glass outer door where the guards
stood and through it the metal inner door that kept her locked in her room.
Playfully, she began to think towards the guard....open the door....now.
In her imagination, the guard did so and she walked through to the inner door.
She knew the combination, but there was no way she could enter it from inside
her room normally, but her new game was amusing. She imagined entering the
code. To her surprise, she was suddenly awoken from her daydreaming to realize
that the door had actually slid open. The guards outside the outer door peered
in shocked and one reached for his radio. She began to think calming thoughts
at both of them, realizing this might be her last chance to escape. They both
relaxed and the one dropped his radio. She strolled past them, smiling at them,
removed their guns and spring down the hall way, while the guards smiled and
nodded at her.
To make a long story short, she escaped. She quickly disguised herself as a
normal teen age girl and fled the country for Great Britian. She decided then
and there that she would never allow her powers to be used for anything but good
again. She was adopted by a wealthy family of landed gentry who had not managed
to have children of their own and after testing was immediately entered into a
top grade college, where she graduated with honors with a degree in criminal
science. She started working as a detective for Scotland Yard and has risen in
the ranks to consultant for the MI5. However, she has take a years sabbatical
to try and track down her two brothers, Wraithe and Seraphim, who she hasn't
seen or heard from in 22 years.
enemy: villain Name:
Powers:
Why is this person your enemy?:
powers: Suggestions....
Telepathy: She is capable of reading the thoughts of others and transmitting
her own.
Limit: She can only do this feat if she is able to put her full concentration
to this act. If she is even the slightest bit distracted, she will only be able
to pick up fuzzy information at best.
Stunt: She can transmit images and thoughts to other people
Stunt: She can recieve images and thoughts from other people
High Metabolism: Her metabolism is slightly higher than the upper limit of
average human metabolism.
Stunt: She heals at a slightly faster rate and is more resistant to disease
Stunt: Her reflexes are faster than a normal humans
Stunt: Her brain functions work at an increased rate, making her mental
processes more efficient.
Limit: She must ingest more calories per day than the average human, at least
four meals a day.
Limit: If she does not ingest a sufficient number of colories, her body slows
down to dangerous rates and she is in danger of falling into a torpor coma
state.
Empathy: She is capable of picking up the emotional states of others at an
increased level.
Stunt: She has a sort of inborn "lie detection" system that lets her know when
people are telling the truth, unless they are skilled at controlling their
emotions and physiological responses.
Stunt: She is a very good criminal negotiator because she can tell exactly what
state the criminals are in and what they want or need to hear.
Limit: She must be completely alone for a substantial period of the day, due to
the fact that her ability to feel what other people feel can overwhelm her
entirely. For instance, if she is around someone who is in considerable
emotional pain, Valkyrie will feel the exact same pain and sadness they feel.
This is debilitating to her mental state. She must also have a strong bond to
the person in question, or must be in the same general area as them.
Telekinesis: She is able to move objects with her mind.
Stunt: She is able to manipulate things suck as locks, light switches, and
small objects with her thoughts. In times of very good concentration, she can
cause her self or other people to levetate, but she must concentrate hard to do
this and is only seldom able to do it.
Stunt: She is able to direct a low-energy "chi" blast at an individual, enough
to knock them off their feet.
Limit: This feat causes her to become exhausted and causes her metabolism to
spike to dangerous rate to keep her overused brain running. Moving small
objects will only make her tired, but the larger the object the more taxing it
is. After a "chi blast" or moving something as large as a human being, she will
most often need help to remove herself from the area before passing out, which
is why she uses this mechanism only as a last ditch defense.
Astroprojection: The ability to project a vaguely solid image of one's self
that is able to manipulate it's environment somewhere that the physical body is
not.
Stunt: She is able to use this feat to see into places her physical body
couldn't normally go.
Limit: She must be somewhere where her physical body will be safe. Also if her
astral body is killed during the exercise, her physical body will be left in a
vegetable state. While astral traveling, her body and life signs will appear as
though she were in a deep coma.
Increased Sensory Perception: Her sight, hearing, and smell are all increased
beyond normal human levels.
Stunt: Her dark vision is significantly improved and she can also detect
infrared at night.
Stunt: She is able to detect smells from several miles away.
Stunt: She is able to detect sounds beyond the range of normal human hearing.
Limit: Her infrared vision is only active at night.
Limit: She recieves terrible migraines from being able to see both at light and
dark, particularly when going directly from one to the other.
Limit: Particularly loud sounds cause her terrible pain.
Weaknesses: Because she is an empath, she is particularly weak to psychic
attacks, even though she is psychicly gifted herself. She tends to avoid those
of her own kind because it is simply too much for her mind to deal with at any
one time. She prefers to be around those people who can represent and empathic
blank. Even though she can't tell what they're thinking, it provides some
relief.
items: Valkyrie is a fairly non-materialistic person. She prefers not to use
any weapons. Even when she was a detective and was forced to carry a gun, she
never used it, preferring to convince her quarry to come in of their own free
will using her powers. She now never carries a weapon.
player: Games I've played: This is my first RPG game. My brother suggested it,
he plays Wraithe on here. We thought some sibling rivalry might make it more
interesting ;-)
Where I live: Hunstvlle, AL
What my hobbies are: Reading, Writing, Society for Creative Anachronism,
computers
What comics I like: Wonder Woman rocks. So does The Sandman and Johnny the
Homicidal Maniac.
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Character Proposal: Valkyrie (Accepted)
Well I like it :D
It seems like there are a lot of characters with psychic elements (even if not all of them are main characters), but thats okay. I like the empath part, especially because it seemed like it could be used powerfully against her. Like if she was around a lot of people who were angry, or sad, her emotions could overcome her...its a good weakness, even while the lie detector part is useful. I also like how she has ties to the police and stuff... I'm not sure why but I like it.
Um...what's your name? And your gender while your at it. I"m not really sure why neither of those are on the character submission thing...they seem like obvious questions (remind me to yell at the admin :wink: ).
But I say yes!
Character Proposal: Valkyrie (Accepted)
Hey thanks! My name is Valentine, go fig, and I'm a girl. ;-)
Character Proposal: Valkyrie (Accepted)
A definite yes, methinks. I like it, plenty of plot hooks, plenty of potential angst, nasty drawbacks to some of her powers... hehe. The only thing I'm wondering about is how a 15 year old girl who is obviously a meta gets "adopted" by the wealthy landed gentry... Perhaps it's more realistic to expect that she was spotted by someone who already worked for Scotland Yard or MI5 and they thought it would be handy to have a Soviet-trained operative in their midst... so she's still being used, but more benignly. So rather than 'adopted' perhaps they just took her under their wing and groomed her for her current position.
Other than that, though, I like it. It'll be interesting if she ever meets Ela, who is a total psychic blank (even though she's not aware of that yet). She'd be one of those people Valkyrie could relax around... :)
Character Proposal: Valkyrie (Accepted)
I vote yes for this too. The proposal is detailed and well thought out and I like the tie in with Wraithe (does that mean we get to hear more from Big Brother too? ;) )
I'd say sign up but I see you have already so there's only one thing left to say...
Welcome :D